October 24, 2007

preserves

on the windowsill --
mason jars brimming
with sunlight

6 Comments:

Blogger Sometimes Saintly Nick said...

And a cat trying to get into the jars.

18:40  
Blogger Anonymous said...

Mmmmmm the smell of molten sugared fruit :)

05:20  
Blogger Martin Teigland said...

I have a question about this one, which I really enjoyed, because I am wrestling with the issue of the title. Could this or should this be equally complete without "preserves"? What do the scholars say?

Martin Teigland

00:13  
Anonymous catnapping said...

the jars are without "preserves." there are no plums or strawberries here.

and as i write this, i realize you are probably reminding me that haiku shouldn't be titled.

of course, you are correct; haiku are not supposed be titled. but that doesn't seem to work for my hillybilly blog. most of my entries aren't really haiku...so i tell myself 'it's okay.'

otoh....it might work for me to go back and only remove titles from those entries where actual haiku was attempted.

05:11  
Anonymous ardi said...

love your images

17:20  
Blogger hakuisan said...

on the windowsill --
mason jars brimming
with sunlight

Yes, leave off the titles. It seems like you are trying to explain further that which doesn't need explaining. No periods either.

You have written a fine haiku. It is strong enough to stand by itself. You caught a moment that is excellent and immediate.

09:01  

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