I have a question about this one, which I really enjoyed, because I am wrestling with the issue of the title. Could this or should this be equally complete without "preserves"? What do the scholars say?
the jars are without "preserves." there are no plums or strawberries here.
and as i write this, i realize you are probably reminding me that haiku shouldn't be titled.
of course, you are correct; haiku are not supposed be titled. but that doesn't seem to work for my hillybilly blog. most of my entries aren't really haiku...so i tell myself 'it's okay.'
otoh....it might work for me to go back and only remove titles from those entries where actual haiku was attempted.
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And a cat trying to get into the jars.
Mmmmmm the smell of molten sugared fruit :)
I have a question about this one, which I really enjoyed, because I am wrestling with the issue of the title. Could this or should this be equally complete without "preserves"? What do the scholars say?
Martin Teigland
the jars are without "preserves." there are no plums or strawberries here.
and as i write this, i realize you are probably reminding me that haiku shouldn't be titled.
of course, you are correct; haiku are not supposed be titled. but that doesn't seem to work for my hillybilly blog. most of my entries aren't really haiku...so i tell myself 'it's okay.'
otoh....it might work for me to go back and only remove titles from those entries where actual haiku was attempted.
love your images
on the windowsill --
mason jars brimming
with sunlight
Yes, leave off the titles. It seems like you are trying to explain further that which doesn't need explaining. No periods either.
You have written a fine haiku. It is strong enough to stand by itself. You caught a moment that is excellent and immediate.
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